FUJIEMI, AMAYA HOSHI ~*not finished*~ « Thread Started on Aug 16, 2008, 10:08pm »
About You ;;
Name/Alias: Liz Age:14 How did you come to this site? (if referred, please state who): Other Charrie Anything you would like to add?:
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Character Basics ;;
Name: Amaya Hoshi Fujiemi Lineage:Nao Mikio Fujiemi (Father) - Akane Cho Fujiemi (Mother, deceased) - Modoka Kotone Fujiemi(Sister) Blood:Pure-Blood Ex House/School:Slytherin Age:22 Day and Month of Birth:February 3rd Work Experience: With one year of training left, Amaya has excelled in healing. As if gifted with psychic abilities, she needs to only see a patient to know what is wrong with them. She has never lost a patient, even ones that are already dying. Floor(s) of Expertise: All floors are open to her. Subtitle: -does not apply?- Wanted Celeb Claim?:Utada Hikaru
Strengths:
Healing Singing Song-writing Fluent in English Mental Spells
Weaknesses:
Alcohol (acts very loud and racious when drunk) Emotions (very emotional) Ravenclaw Boys Her Fears Chocolate Anything
Fears:
Failure Death Losing people she cares about Losing her mental Abilities. Never falling in love
Character Complexities ;;
Background/History: (Minimum 3 paragraphs) Amaya was born inland of Japan's Northern-Most Island, Hokkaido. From the day she was born, you could tell her life was going to spiral into a Cinderella-esque story. Born a beautiful baby, her mother would only have the strength for two children. In Amaya's fifth year of life, her mother gave birth to her sister, Modoka. The second pregnancy proved to be to much for her frail body, and she passed away.
Amaya and Modoka's lives were uneventful for a time, growing and being children until Amaya's 11th birthday. Receiving the acceptance letter to Hogwarts, Amaya was sent to take a plane to Europe, where she would then take the train to Hogwarts. A shy and timid child, she was extremely nervous that she would not fit in. Potions proved to be Amaya's best class, and she decided then that she would become a healer so she could help others who were ill. She made many friends, including Moonlite Greyback and Nikki Lupin.
Amaya is now 22, and working on her last year in training to be a healer. She is a pure-blood, and therefore has an arranged husband. While she does not care for him, she is going through with the wedding for her father and her father alone. Modoka, now 17, has a 9 month old daughter, Gina Ai, with her arranged husband, Osamu Taeko Yukata. Amaya visits Japan whenever she can, but prefers to stay in Europe.
Appearance: (Minimum 3 paragraphs) Amaya is 100% Asian goodness. Her hair is as black as the midnight sky, and is soft and silky to the touch. Her hair is thin, and moves as though it was constantly being blown by the wind. She keeps her hair down, putting it up only when she is in class or while practicing Healing. Her eyes are a chocolate brown, complimenting their almond shape. Her eyelashes are long and thin, every easy to put mascara on. She uses black glitter eyeliner. Her nose is long but small, not the most noticeable feature of her face. She has a single piercing on the right side of her nose, and 3 in each ear. Her lips are medium sized and are usually covered with a thin layer of pink lipgloss.
She has a generally thin body, and looks as though you could break her in half. However, she has lots of muscle and strength. Her abs are toned and her stomach flat. There is no trace of fat on her body. Her skin is usually a light color, almost like oatmeal, but when she's tan, she's very bronze, and doesn't burn easily.
Personality: (Minimum 3 paragraphs) As a child, Amaya was very shy. She sat in the back of the class, wanting no one to call on her, or even notice her. She was especially shy around the opposite sex. She would blush and fall over anytime she was around a male. When she entered Hogwarts, she tried to be as inconspicuous as before. However, certain people *cough*Moonlite*cough*, would not leave her alone. Seeing that she could no longer hide, she started to come out of her shell. Little by little, she got to be more comfortable around people.
She is generally a sweet and kindhearted person, who never acts irrationally or panics. One of her nicknames is "Mom". Honestly, she seems to good to be true. But she has her faults. She loves to go to bars and hang out, and she has a bad perception of "how many drinks is too many". She tends to whine and complain and basically be the opposite of her normal self when she is drunk. She usually complains that she will never find a boyfriend.
Angery Amaya is not a person you want to meet. When Amaya gets pissed off, be prepared for physical and verbal abuse! Not only will she be spewing curse words that haven't been invented yet, she will probably make it so you can NEVER have children. N-E-V-E-R. She does not take kindly to nasty things about friends or family, EPSECIALLY jokes about her mother. Unless your very close friends with her, the phrase "Yo Mama" should never be uttered around her!
Sample Post: (Minimum 4 paragraphs)
Playground School bells ring...again
A red car pulled up to the school. A little asian girl ran out, a large smile on her face. Her father was clothed in black, a solemn look on his face. The little girls face fell. Her fathers mouth moved, and told her the news. Eyes became wide and filled with tears. Scream filled the playground area, heads truning in shock and curiosity toward the sound.
Rain Clouds come to play...again
The sky clouded over and opened up over the little red car. The drive was silent and sob-filled. No radio, no talk. Just raindrops, hitting the car's roof, almost as if crying along with the whole family. The house came into veiw, and the little girl saw that the trees were bare. The wind blew all of the cherry blossoms away.
Has no one told you she's not breathing?
The body was on the bed, stil, silent. The baby crying softly in the other room, the girl stepped closer. Lips trembling, she set a hand onto her mothers. Cold. They were ice. The girl climbed onto the bed and curled into a ball by her mother. Her father left the room so she could be alone. The tears came again as she whispered, "Goodbye, Mama"
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Re: FUJIEMI, AMAYA HOSHI ~*not finished*~ « Reply #1 on Nov 3, 2008, 9:49am »
Your background, appearance, personality, and sample are all still too short. You need to go into more depth in each aspect, a use of metaphors and poignant adjectives will help you I think - perhaps go into 'why' in some circumstances like her shyness or what makes her tick or piss her off. Really think about your character, not just tell me what she is. Also, a couple things - for Healer each healer is usually designated to a certain floor of St. Mungo's because that is their expertise - unless you want your character to be a private healer for a family or something. And due to the influx of pureblood ex-Slytherins, I'll have to ask you to either change her house or her blood for the sake of keeping things dynamic on WDC. Good luck!